I have added a couple of differences to the original,but the story is exactly the same.Golavus is a top quality,damsel in distress writer.
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"Excuse me sir,the bar is closing!" Louise said firmly with a hint of sweetness in her voice.
Her client took a swig from his nearly empty beer bottle before flashing a wry smile."Come on sweetie,the night is still young!"
"It's two in the morning sir,and all the other clients have gone home.I can call a cab if you..."
"What's your name,beautiful?"
"It's Louise," she replied,trying to humour him."And what may I call you?"
"David," he answered,holding up his bottle as if to salute her."And may I say,it's been a while since I've seen a Hooters girl as cute as you."
Louise responded by flicking her long dark hair behind her shoulders,realising that her standard Hooters uniform of a white vest,which held the Hooters name on it and symbol of a pair of owl's eyes.She also wore tan nylons and sneakers was having the same effect on this David,that it did with many of her customers.She leant in a little closer,and biting her lip to look sexy and suggestive she said,"Listen,me and my friend really need to be closing up,so if you leave now,I promise I'll give you 10% off your next round of drinks."
David glugged back what remained of his drink before getting up,where he asked."You sure you don't want me to stick around?"
"Quite sure!" Louise insisted with her smile still wide as she guided him to the exit.She bid him goodnight as David walked off into the night,before she exhaled in relief as she locked the door,flipped the closed sign and shut the blinds."Thank God,I thought he'd never leave," she shouted in the direction of the counter."How much did we take tonight?"
"Barely any point in us opening," replied Naomi as she counted the evenings takings.Louise's colleague shared her black hair colour,though her hair just reached her shoulders.She was wearing the same Hooters uniform as Louise,and was sitting on a bar stool while leafing through the bills inside the counter."Can't blame Deborah and Alice for leaving early.At least it shouldn't take us long to clean up."
"I'll get mopping the bar!" Louise announced.But she'd only taken one step away from the door,when there was a loud knocking against it.
"Eergh,that guy again!"she growled.Fuming,she whirled on the spot,unlocked the door,wrenched it open and yelled:"Listen you creep,I won't tell you aga..."
She trailed off,when a tall grinning man with slicked black hair,pointed a pistol at her.
"Oh my God!" Louise screeched,just as two men appeared from either side of the entrance and grabbed an arm each.She was bundled inside by the goons,as the grinning man clamped his leather gloved palm over her mouth,preventing her from screaming.
"What the hell is this?" Naomi cried,leaping off her bar stool so fast,that she spilt coins all over the floor.
"Careful there,cutie.Don't want to be spilling our payday under the tables," the grinning man exclaimed as he pointed the pistol at her."Take a seat back down on that stool,after dragging over another for your friend here,"he added as he pushed Louise forward.
She tenatively stepped forward,and as she sat beside Naomi on another stool,Louise asked,"What are you here for?"
"A decent payday!"was the grinning man's reply,his pistol still trained on Naomi,but his eyes on the money piled on the counter."Not a lot there,ladies.Where's your safe amd what's the combination?"
"It's in the office underneath the manager's desk,and the combination is "86217",Louise replied,trying to keep calm and controlled as she could under gunpoint.
"Much obliged!"the still grinning man sneered."Fellas,tie these ladies up while I clean the office out."
His goons seemed keen to comply,withdrawing long coils of white rope from their rucksacks.Neither Louise or Naomi dared say a word as their hands were pulled behind their backs,where they were crossed over and bound.They looked at each other for support as more rope was wound about their upper bodies,above and below their breasts,before their legs were pinned together and also bound above their knees and about their ankles,the rope chafing their skin through their issued nylons.
"What will you do with us?" Naomi asked as she watched the knots securing her ankles being tightened.
"Depends on what the big man says,"the goon binding her replied."Don't worry,once we get our money,we'll clear out of here!"
His words didn't reassure Louise,who apprehensively picked at the cords encasing her wrists with her varnished fingernails,but she found no slack."You honestly think you can waltz in here and hold us hostage?"she snapped,as the man withdrew a white rag and a piece of yellow sponge each.
"As a matter of fact,yes we do,"one sneered at her,and before Louise could protest further,a sponge was shoved into her open mouth,and to stop her spitting it out,he pulled the white rag over her lips and tied the ends together behind her head.Louise emitted moans of indignation while watching as Naomi was subjected to an identical gag,the white cloth covering her lower face under her nose to her chin.
At this point grinning man returned,though he wasn't grinning anymore."The safe had barely any money in it!"he barked angrily,his fist clenched around the small wad of bills in his hand."It's already been cleared out!"
"That's impossible!"his accomplice howled."We've been scouting this place for weeks.Their manager always clears it out on Tuesday!"
Louise wanted to say what she'd tried to tell them earlier,that her manager had taken the money to the bank early,as he was going on holiday for the week.But all she could manage through her gag was a muffled,"Mmmmm ttttrrrddd tttllllnnnn yyymmm!"
"So now what?"the third man asked."Are we really going to waste weeks of planning,just for a couple hundred between us?'
The grinning man's grin returned,and neither Louise nor Naomi liked the way it was directed at them.
"Here's an idea,"his grin was pure evil as he made his suggestion."Why don't we take these two with us? I know a guy with contacts in the Middle East,who's always on the lookout for cuties like these two.And he pays very well."
The Hooters waitresses eyes widened in horror.White slavery? No,no it couldn't happen? Yet,when the other two men nodded in agreement with grinning man,their worst fears were confirmed.
"NNNNMMM LLLTT SSS GGGMMM!" Louise squealed in unison with Naomi as both ladies were picked up from their stools by the intruders,being held underneath their shoulders and knees.Louise's long raven hair swished about as she struggled,whilst Naomi bucked her bound legs as she fought the grip of the man holding her.Yet nothing they could muster would break their captors grip,and they could only writhe about in despair as the grinning man led them in a convoy towards the bar entrance.
But despair turned to surprise when the door was flung open before they could get there,and in walked a familiar man.
"DDDVVVDDD!"Louise cried in shock.
David,the man who had overstayed his welcome earlier,now blocked the crooks path.He couldn't have worn a more different expression than before,now looking stern and determined,instead of cheerful and relaxed.He held a pistol in his hand,which he aimed at grinning man before barking:"Let the ladies go,and put your hands above your head now!"
Grinning man didn't seem all that threatened."Looks like we've got a have a go hero on our hands,"he chuckled confidently."Very dashing of you,but as you can see we're in a hurry,so if you'll excuse us..."
"Not a chance,I'm bringing you three in!" David snapped,his eyes fierce as he glared at the crooks.
"Oh really? You and what army?" Grinning man snapped back.
David didn't reply straight away,instead he smiled to himself like he'd heard a joke only he'd understood.
"Why do people always say that?"he asked."It's just asking for stuff like this to happen."
"POLICE,FREEZE!"shouted a number of armed officers as they burst through two fire exits and the kitchen door,completely surrounding the intruders on three sides.As Louise and Naomi squeaked through their gags in excitement,the men realised they were outnumbered,and they quickly surrendered.
As the crooks were locked in handcuffs,Louise and Naomi were untied by their rescuers.David personally saw to the untying of Louise,and after ungagging her,he proceeded to release her wrists where he explained:
"Sorry for earlier,Louise.I'm not usually a lecherous drunk.I'm a member of secret services.We've been watching these three for weeks,and when we identified this bar as their next target,we thought we'd catch them in the act.I didn't intend for you to get caught up in all this,and I'm sorry."
"That's okay," Louise replied as her arms were pulled free."I'm just glad you were there when we needed you.Thank you,David."
Flashing her the same cheeky smile from earlier,David asked."So what discount does this entitle me too?"
In response,Louise suddenly wrapped her arms around David,and gave him a warm,deeply grateful kiss.She smiled,seeing her rescuer blush.
"For this,you get a night of drinks on us." Louise told him,still smiling affectionately at him.She admired David's physique,and hoped perhaps she would like to see him again.
The End?
Louise responded by flicking her long dark hair behind her shoulders,realising that her standard Hooters uniform of a white vest,which held the Hooters name on it and symbol of a pair of owl's eyes.She also wore tan nylons and sneakers was having the same effect on this David,that it did with many of her customers.She leant in a little closer,and biting her lip to look sexy and suggestive she said,"Listen,me and my friend really need to be closing up,so if you leave now,I promise I'll give you 10% off your next round of drinks."
David glugged back what remained of his drink before getting up,where he asked."You sure you don't want me to stick around?"
"Quite sure!" Louise insisted with her smile still wide as she guided him to the exit.She bid him goodnight as David walked off into the night,before she exhaled in relief as she locked the door,flipped the closed sign and shut the blinds."Thank God,I thought he'd never leave," she shouted in the direction of the counter."How much did we take tonight?"
"Barely any point in us opening," replied Naomi as she counted the evenings takings.Louise's colleague shared her black hair colour,though her hair just reached her shoulders.She was wearing the same Hooters uniform as Louise,and was sitting on a bar stool while leafing through the bills inside the counter."Can't blame Deborah and Alice for leaving early.At least it shouldn't take us long to clean up."
"I'll get mopping the bar!" Louise announced.But she'd only taken one step away from the door,when there was a loud knocking against it.
"Eergh,that guy again!"she growled.Fuming,she whirled on the spot,unlocked the door,wrenched it open and yelled:"Listen you creep,I won't tell you aga..."
She trailed off,when a tall grinning man with slicked black hair,pointed a pistol at her.
"Oh my God!" Louise screeched,just as two men appeared from either side of the entrance and grabbed an arm each.She was bundled inside by the goons,as the grinning man clamped his leather gloved palm over her mouth,preventing her from screaming.
"What the hell is this?" Naomi cried,leaping off her bar stool so fast,that she spilt coins all over the floor.
"Careful there,cutie.Don't want to be spilling our payday under the tables," the grinning man exclaimed as he pointed the pistol at her."Take a seat back down on that stool,after dragging over another for your friend here,"he added as he pushed Louise forward.
She tenatively stepped forward,and as she sat beside Naomi on another stool,Louise asked,"What are you here for?"
"A decent payday!"was the grinning man's reply,his pistol still trained on Naomi,but his eyes on the money piled on the counter."Not a lot there,ladies.Where's your safe amd what's the combination?"
"It's in the office underneath the manager's desk,and the combination is "86217",Louise replied,trying to keep calm and controlled as she could under gunpoint.
"Much obliged!"the still grinning man sneered."Fellas,tie these ladies up while I clean the office out."
His goons seemed keen to comply,withdrawing long coils of white rope from their rucksacks.Neither Louise or Naomi dared say a word as their hands were pulled behind their backs,where they were crossed over and bound.They looked at each other for support as more rope was wound about their upper bodies,above and below their breasts,before their legs were pinned together and also bound above their knees and about their ankles,the rope chafing their skin through their issued nylons.
"What will you do with us?" Naomi asked as she watched the knots securing her ankles being tightened.
"Depends on what the big man says,"the goon binding her replied."Don't worry,once we get our money,we'll clear out of here!"
His words didn't reassure Louise,who apprehensively picked at the cords encasing her wrists with her varnished fingernails,but she found no slack."You honestly think you can waltz in here and hold us hostage?"she snapped,as the man withdrew a white rag and a piece of yellow sponge each.
"As a matter of fact,yes we do,"one sneered at her,and before Louise could protest further,a sponge was shoved into her open mouth,and to stop her spitting it out,he pulled the white rag over her lips and tied the ends together behind her head.Louise emitted moans of indignation while watching as Naomi was subjected to an identical gag,the white cloth covering her lower face under her nose to her chin.
At this point grinning man returned,though he wasn't grinning anymore."The safe had barely any money in it!"he barked angrily,his fist clenched around the small wad of bills in his hand."It's already been cleared out!"
"That's impossible!"his accomplice howled."We've been scouting this place for weeks.Their manager always clears it out on Tuesday!"
Louise wanted to say what she'd tried to tell them earlier,that her manager had taken the money to the bank early,as he was going on holiday for the week.But all she could manage through her gag was a muffled,"Mmmmm ttttrrrddd tttllllnnnn yyymmm!"
"So now what?"the third man asked."Are we really going to waste weeks of planning,just for a couple hundred between us?'
The grinning man's grin returned,and neither Louise nor Naomi liked the way it was directed at them.
"Here's an idea,"his grin was pure evil as he made his suggestion."Why don't we take these two with us? I know a guy with contacts in the Middle East,who's always on the lookout for cuties like these two.And he pays very well."
The Hooters waitresses eyes widened in horror.White slavery? No,no it couldn't happen? Yet,when the other two men nodded in agreement with grinning man,their worst fears were confirmed.
"NNNNMMM LLLTT SSS GGGMMM!" Louise squealed in unison with Naomi as both ladies were picked up from their stools by the intruders,being held underneath their shoulders and knees.Louise's long raven hair swished about as she struggled,whilst Naomi bucked her bound legs as she fought the grip of the man holding her.Yet nothing they could muster would break their captors grip,and they could only writhe about in despair as the grinning man led them in a convoy towards the bar entrance.
But despair turned to surprise when the door was flung open before they could get there,and in walked a familiar man.
"DDDVVVDDD!"Louise cried in shock.
David,the man who had overstayed his welcome earlier,now blocked the crooks path.He couldn't have worn a more different expression than before,now looking stern and determined,instead of cheerful and relaxed.He held a pistol in his hand,which he aimed at grinning man before barking:"Let the ladies go,and put your hands above your head now!"
Grinning man didn't seem all that threatened."Looks like we've got a have a go hero on our hands,"he chuckled confidently."Very dashing of you,but as you can see we're in a hurry,so if you'll excuse us..."
"Not a chance,I'm bringing you three in!" David snapped,his eyes fierce as he glared at the crooks.
"Oh really? You and what army?" Grinning man snapped back.
David didn't reply straight away,instead he smiled to himself like he'd heard a joke only he'd understood.
"Why do people always say that?"he asked."It's just asking for stuff like this to happen."
"POLICE,FREEZE!"shouted a number of armed officers as they burst through two fire exits and the kitchen door,completely surrounding the intruders on three sides.As Louise and Naomi squeaked through their gags in excitement,the men realised they were outnumbered,and they quickly surrendered.
As the crooks were locked in handcuffs,Louise and Naomi were untied by their rescuers.David personally saw to the untying of Louise,and after ungagging her,he proceeded to release her wrists where he explained:
"Sorry for earlier,Louise.I'm not usually a lecherous drunk.I'm a member of secret services.We've been watching these three for weeks,and when we identified this bar as their next target,we thought we'd catch them in the act.I didn't intend for you to get caught up in all this,and I'm sorry."
"That's okay," Louise replied as her arms were pulled free."I'm just glad you were there when we needed you.Thank you,David."
Flashing her the same cheeky smile from earlier,David asked."So what discount does this entitle me too?"
In response,Louise suddenly wrapped her arms around David,and gave him a warm,deeply grateful kiss.She smiled,seeing her rescuer blush.
"For this,you get a night of drinks on us." Louise told him,still smiling affectionately at him.She admired David's physique,and hoped perhaps she would like to see him again.
The End?
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